5464 谢振礼托福范文：耐心策略 （TOEFL 20121208）
5464 TOEFL Essay: 耐心策略
托福大作文 20121208 China
Jeenn Lee Hsieh 谢振礼范文
托福真题 TOEFL Writing Topic:
>Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “Patience is usually not a good strategy, so we (people) should take action now rather than later”. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
实验范文 TOEFL Example Essay (Jeenn Lee Hsieh):
Patience is either a good strategy of waiting and hoping, or a bad one of losing time and opportunities. Under different circumstances, more often than not we should wait and hope in order to achieve, but sometimes it is better for us to act immediately before "golden" opportunities are lost forever. At best, patience is wisdom; and at worst, it is laziness in the abscence of courage.
Being a great capacity associated with wisdom, patience usually a good strategy. Since most great achievements require time, patience may be regarded as a form of wisdom which is essential to successfully managing many things, big and small. Generally speaking, that wisdom is summed up in two words: wait and hope. Like farmers, for instance, we need to learn that we cannot sow and reap the same day, and that we should keep things going with hope, particularly when the going is hard and slow. Also in social life, without patience we at heart cannot work together efficiently with other people and society cannot function at all in civil order. To paraphrase the wisdom of an old Chinese saying : "lack of patience in small matters can create havoc in great ones".
Nevertheless, patience has its limits; being taken too far, it goes beyond laziness to become cowardice. Hence, it is not always realistic to believe that all good things in the world come to us just because we wait long enough, refusing to know what on earth we are hoping for. Indeed, patience must be founded on realistic hope and it is not a virtue, provided that it is not out of necessity. That is to say, patience may become a bad strategy if it is passive, which means not taking right action in the right place at the right moment. Ironically, patience ought to be understood as the quality of being active, or a form of action, which demands courage and force so that time is not hopelessly lost. Far from being lazy and cowardly, we should not hesitate imprudently and wait passively but should rather take quick action in the right direction now rather than later, considering that "time and tide" shall wait for no lazy people.
Accordingly, the wise policy is to seek patience and action in equal amounts. Patience alone without wisdom does not lead to great achievements, whereas hasty actions are seldom wise and often doomed. We may believe that laziness along with cowardice is a bad strategy, and we should also know that the wisdom of patience is doing something else in the meantime and not waiting foolishly like cowards. (Essay created by Jeenn Lee Hsieh, firstname.lastname@example.org )
IELTS 满分9.0 TOEFL满分30 晋级--沿溪行忘写作路之远近
雅思4.0 托福10-11 +15天 突破晋级到雅思4.5托福12-13
雅思4.5 托福12-13 +30天 突破晋级到雅思5.0托福14-17
雅思5.0 托福14-17 +60天 突破晋级到雅思5.5托福18-20
雅思5.5 托福18-20 +90天 突破晋级到雅思6.0托福21-23
雅思6.0 托福21-23 +120天突破晋级到雅思6.5托福24-26
雅思6.5 托福24-26 +150天突破晋级到雅思7.0托福27-28
雅思7.0 托福27-28 +180天突破晋级到雅思7.5托福29
雅思7.5 托福29 +210天突破晋级到雅思8.0托福30
雅思8.0 托福30 +240天突破晋级到雅思8.5托福30
雅思8.5 托福30 +270天突破晋级到雅思9.0托福30
雅思9.0 托福30 母语水平难得满分达人十全十美
【评分标准】IELTS-TOEFL Scoring Guide 满分。
1. 主题有焦点--a well-focused thesis
IELTS>task response. fully addresses all parts of the task. presents a fully developed position in answer to the question.
TOEFL>effectively addresses the topic and task.
2. 结构有组织--a well-organized structure
IELTS>coherence and cohesion. skillfully manages paragraphing.
TOEFL>well-organized and well-developed. displays unity, progression, and coherence.
3. 内容有支持--a well-supported content
IELTS>with relevant, fully extended and well-supported ideas
TOEFL>uses clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details.
1. 修辞求效率--rhetoric (language effectiveness)
IELTS>grammatical range and accuracy. uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention
TOEFL>displays consistent facility in the use of language.
2. 句法求变化--syntax (sentence variety)
IELTS>uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors occur only as 'slips'
TOEFL>demonstrates syntactic variety, though it may have minor grammatical errors..
3. 词汇求适当--lexicon (word choice)
IELTS>lexical resource. uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features; rare minor errors occur only as 'slips'
TOEFL>demonstrates appropriate word choice and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical errors.